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People should only buy locally grown food ; it is better for individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

#people #food #individuals #society
Some people believe that we should only purchase the
food
 which is nurtured locally, but in my point of view, I do not agree with
this
 statement not only because international trade can be advantageous for the local economy, but
also
 because having various types of
food
 is a more healthy living habit.
Firstly
, in terms of society, it is definite that developing a global trading market can boost a
country
's financial status.
Food
 is one of the most important things in our lives, so there is a tremendous market worth billion of dollars. if a
country
 can seize
this
 opportunity, it will be beneficial for the companies which are working in the agriculture field to expand their businesses globally.
Therefore
, a higher economic profile can be created by trading
food
 with other countries, and it can
finally
 increase the total income of the whole
country
, leading to a greater nation.
Second,
regarding individuals, having
food
 produced from other places can make us healthier. Because of climate reasons, and other subtle factors, a
country
 cannot produce all types of
food
 that we normally consume.
For example
, India is a
country
 with higher temperatures,
as a result
, some kinds of vegetation which can be only grown in cooler nations are not able to be produced in India. In fact, it is essential that balanced dietary habits are advantageous to our health.
Therefore
, imported
food
 can provide citizens with a better choice for maintaining their health. In conclusion, opening a
food
 market can not only increase the economic status to a greater level but
also
 it can make people healthier by balancing their eating habits.
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