IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

The given maps describe developments which took place at the coastal resort of Templeton a 15-year period from 1990 to 2005.

The given maps describe developments which took place at the coastal resort of Templeton a 15-year period from 1990 to 2005.
#maps #developments #place #resort #templeton #-year #period
The given maps describe developments which took place at the coastal resort of Templeton
a
Change preposition
over a
show examples
15-year period from 1990 to 2005.
Overall
, it can be seen that
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
beach
Correct article usage
the beach
show examples
resort
Fix the agreement mistake
resorts
show examples
 had developed substantially from a holiday statement to a more industrial tourism centre over the given period.
According to
 the map, in 1990, there were constructed
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
show examples
several public facilities
such
 as
school
Correct article usage
a school
show examples
, parking, hospital and railway station.
Also
Add a comma
,Also
show examples
 there
were
Change the verb form
was
show examples
 a woodland with individual houses which were replaced by
factory
Add an article
the factory
a factory
show examples
 in 2005. A new haven was built next to
railway
Add an article
the railway
a railway
show examples
 line. The most noticeable thing was that
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 all of
trees
Add an article
the trees
show examples
 had been cut down to make
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
way
to
Change preposition
for
show examples
 the new airport that was situated in the north-east corner of the river. Another greater change was
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 the left side of the river, around the lake. Most of the houses in the
south-west
Correct your spelling
southwest
show examples
 side were demolished and replaced by new
skyscrappers
Correct your spelling
skyscrapers
 and
supermarket
Fix the agreement mistake
supermarkets
show examples
. Only a few trees north of the river
were remained
Change to the active voice
remained
have remained
show examples
.
Submitted by dnm.best on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: