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All cars that burn fossil fuel should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuel
Today's technology is to use electric
car
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due to
 some
benifits
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benefits
 and
old fashioned
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cars
 are
runing
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running
 on fossil
fuel
. I will totally disagree with the statement. First and
formost
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foremost
for most
, it can be very difficult to replace electric
cars
 with other
fuel
cars
 in a go means that in a single day. Because the budget is
very
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 important factor in
this
 case. Like if a customer has
low
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 budget and
he
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cannot buy
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a new
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new fashioned
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car
then
 it will badly impact that customer.
As well as
 the companies will
also
 be
effected
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affected
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 with
this
fast changing
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.
Secondly
, in our country, the
electicity
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electricity
 is
very
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 big failure.
However
, petrol,
diseal
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diesel
 can be
any where
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 possible to gather for
vehicle
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the vehicle
a vehicle
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.
This
car
 mode rapid change will impact
place
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places
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 where there is no electricity
due to
this
, how a person can charge it's
car
? And in
emergency
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 situation,
fuel
 can be helpful because it is easily available and refilled within no time unless the petrol stations
has
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huge
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 number of gathering of
cars
.
To conclude
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apply
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this
,
although
the
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fossil
fuel
 engines are harmful
for
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 our life and nature. But
cars
 with harmful gases should be reduced not totally banned. Poor
individual
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individuals
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 cannot arrange electric
vehicle
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vehicles
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 but rich
one
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ones
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 can afford electric
vehicle
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vehicles
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.
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