Some people feel that the legal age at which people can marry should be at least 21. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people feel that the legal age at which people can marry should be at least 21, I agree with
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statement. The reason why I agree with the statement is
because
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sharing your
life
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with another
person
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is a very important deal that should be thought
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lot. When you marry a
person
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, you have to connect more than just your heart, but you have to connect
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family, time, money, and so many more. You have to sacrifice a lot too, including yourself and your priority. Spending the rest of your
life
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with a
person
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means you have to communicate and understand each other very well. Marrying is not something
everyone
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should rush, because finding your
person
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may take a
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.
Everyone
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shouldn't rush getting
marred
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just because they crave affection because it helps them feel loved, valued, and supported.
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human nature to want to feel connected with others.
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,
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very important to remember that
everyone
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have
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to be responsible for
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their
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own happiness and well-being first and after they're ready to share
your
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apply
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everything including your happiness and well-being,
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is the right time to get married.
Everyone
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wants a settled
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, and
me
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personally I want to be successful
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,
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and get my
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well enough so the
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I'm sharing my
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could
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be happy as I am happy with where I am
then
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. 21 is the perfect minimum age for getting married because by
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people are more mature and well thought
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then
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rushing, doing and being naïve marrying someone so soon, without thinking about the future of both you and your
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's happiness and
life
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Legal age
  • Marriage
  • Maturity
  • Stability
  • Individual choice
  • Freedom
  • Cultural practices
  • Religious practices
  • Education
  • Career aspirations
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