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Students are becoming more and more reliant on technology. What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers, and what are some of the possible solutions?

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Nowadays,
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 is becoming increasingly trending among pupils.
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 trend can lead to some serious problems
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 as complete dependency on computers and juveniles will be unable to do even some basic tasks without computers.
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,
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 can be tackled easily with some simple steps like minimising the
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 of automated systems. To Commence with, Younger generations are becoming more and more dependent on these machines as they
use
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 them a lot in their everyday life. What it means is that
students
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 are not able to do even some simple tasks without the
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 of
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.
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, In a survey, a simple mathematical task was given to
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 of 10th standard, which only four out of fifty
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 were able to do, others demanded a phone or a calculator. That survey showed the effect of reliance on computers.
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, There are multifarious solutions to
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 hurdle. The most prominent solution is to minimize the
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 of these technological gadgets. Minimizing the
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 of these devices can lead to a significant decrease in dependence on these devices. To exemplify, In the previous survey that I mentioned, All of the pupils who were able to accomplish the task hadn't had any technological gadgets with them and they hadn't used them for anything other than entertainment.
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, addiction and
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 of
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 are increasing highly among
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.
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, they should be cautious about its problems and should not depend completely on
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.
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. they should only
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 these devices to some limited extent.
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