The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows the
unemployment
rates
among females in the countries that make up the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. This
graph shows that while
the unemployment
rates
among these countries decreased, it is not the case for Scotland.
In 2013, England recorded the highest number of female unemployment
rates
, recording the highest female unemployment
rate in both 2013 and 2014 at 6.8%. However
, this
number decreased by three-tenth percentage point at 6.5%.
Wales recorded the lowest unemployment
rates
in 2013 among females, but this
record was broken by Northern Ireland at 4.6%.
In a one-year time frame, Northern Ireland was able to decrease their unemployment
rates
among females by 1%, the lowest recorded among all. This
show that Northern Ireland did everything it could to improve its unemployment
rate among female, showing an improvement in gender equality in the workplace.
In contrast
, Scotland was the only country which has had an increasing percentage of unemployed women, an increase of 0.5% compared to 2013.Submitted by cspheaa on
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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