The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018

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The line diagram illustrates the number of

outlet

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closures and openings in a particular country throughout the duration from 2011 to 2018.

Overall

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it is clear that

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the number of stores closed was higher than the

opened

Correct pronoun usage

ones opened

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at the beginning,

In contrast

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, at the of the period, it was inverted.

According to

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the diagram, the figure for shops that closed was

initially

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smaller than the

outlet

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that opened but went the opposite

at the end

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of the year. It started at around 8500 for the shops opening number, which was higher than the

stores

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store's

stores'

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closure by approximately 2000, in the same time. From 2012 to 2014, the amount of

outlet

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closures increased gradually, and remained higher than the openings, but plummeted to less than 1000 in the following period.

On the other hand

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, during the period from 2016 to 2018, the figure for shops closure showed a decreasing trend.

Whereas

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, it went the opposite for the

outlet

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that opened. It finished at slightly above 5000,

in contrast

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, the sum of stores opened dropped to reach a low of 3000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words outlet with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

179 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

trend
fluctuation
peak
decline
surge
stabilize
correlation
economic conditions
consumer behavior
technological advancements
urban development
employment
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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018

Nowadays, most countries improve the standard of living through economic development. But some social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of the phenomenon outweigh the disadvantages.

Schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the Internet, and they can study just as well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Both government investment in public transport systems and reductions in public transport ticket prices will help to reduce transport pollution greatly. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people think that it’s a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it’s important to keep working life compeletly separate from social life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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