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Road transport is taking over rail services. Discuss the positive and negative effects of this development. Is this true for your country?

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Railways are being taken over by Vehicles
such
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, buses and bikes. The advantage of
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 phenomenon is that
people
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 are now not
time
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-barred for their travelling
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 the disadvantage is the rise in pollution. In
India
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,
this
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 statement is not true as only high-class individuals prefer their own vehicle and most of the population still prefer trains for long journeys. The main benefit of shifting towards their own vehicle over the trains is individuals are not
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 bound for their
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.
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, there are only a few trains that run on their specific
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, and if a person gets late for it
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 he/she may miss it,
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,
this
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 isn’t the case with their own transportation.
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, there is only 1
train
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 which runs between Delhi and Patiala,
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,
people
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travel
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 by car between these two cities.
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, there is a huge rise in pollution
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 the increase in the use of
cars
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.
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 is because
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 the carbon emission of hundred
cars
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 would be equivalent to a single
train
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’s engine.
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, in
India
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, the government announced for 1 week that for
travel
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 of 200 kilometres or more, the use of a
train
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 is mandatory, and it has resulted in a mass reduction in harmful gases in the air. In our country,
India
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, there is a major shift towards
cars
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 by
people
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 from a high-income background as the same
time
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, the normal public who are in the majority still prefer
train
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due to
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 the high comfort and less cost.
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, as per numerous ,surveys it has been shown that almost 70 per cent of the population still travels by
train
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. In conclusion, even though
people
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 have to stay on
time
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 to
travel
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 by
train
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, it gives less harm to our environment.
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 is the reason that In
India
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people
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travel
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 more by
train
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 as compared to
cars
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.

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