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One of major issues facing world today is over population. What problem arise from this situation? What measures can be taken to deal with it?

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Overpopulation is becoming more widespread in many parts of the world these days. There are several problems caused by
this
 trend, and various solutions could be taken to improve the situation. There are a variety of different problems with
this
 phenomenon.
To begin
 with, habitats to live
are
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 more and more minimized. When there isn’t enough land to build common houses, apartments will rise immediately. So there are more habitats for people to live
.
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However
, if we live in an apartment, we will feel uncomfortable and dependent on neighbours. Worse yet, we might have a misunderstanding with our neighbours and it isn’t helpful for our life after that.
For example
, when you live in an apartment, there will have some unpleasant neighbours. They always make noise with karaoke loudspeakers or throw pollutants at illegal places. Another significant problem to mention is that jobs opportunity will decrease. The admission rate of getting a job in the company is more augment because there are lots of nominees.
According to
 the report of Spotify company, each position missing always has 4,or 5 nominees, which means that you have to beat the other 4 opponents. Despite these circumstances, there are several measures that governments could take to solve the problems.
Firstly
, an effective solution would be to propagate family planning for everyone.
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 that 1 family should have 2
children
. Why? Because 2
children
 in a family are the best standard.
Whereas
 parents can give them the best way to educate and take care of them.
In addition
, if each family can follow, the population can be controlled.
For example
, if they are born with 3 or 4
children
, they can’t take care of all of them effectively and the child can be naughty. The second measure would be for individuals to educate
children
 about gender early. So that
children
 can have a perception about it and know how to avoid it.
According to
 the study of Havard University,
children
 in developed countries have consciousness about gender better than
children
 in developing countries, so the Government
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there can control the population effectively. In conclusion, the problem of overpopulation is unlikely to be entirely eliminated in the short term.
However
, various measures can be taken to tackle the issue to reduce the impact it is having on the current society.
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