In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
Nowadays people can decide
the
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on the
house
what
they want, it could be an apartment or a landed Correct word choice
that
house
. Moreover
, they can choose between owning or renting a house
, but in some small countries, owning a house
is important from their perspective as a result
of price
of property Correct article usage
the price
rises
over Wrong verb form
rising
years
, and Correct article usage
the years
this
is a negative situation for the government
since it could be hard to govern their community to design and develop their countries.
First of all, the main reason why people in this
modern’s era prefer owning rather than renting house
Correct article usage
a house
because
they believe owning a Add a missing verb
is because
house
could be an investment and giving
a more privacy for them as they can make a rule of their property. Wrong verb form
give
Moreover
, they are not ruled by anyone due to
they own their properties. For example
, based on my experience, when I was student
in Surabaya (an Add an article
a student
Indonesia
city), I rent an apartment, but I could not make a decoration inasmuch as the owner forbade me. Correct your spelling
Indonesian
In addition
, the owner received my money since they did investment of
their apartment.
Change preposition
in
On the other hand
, in a small country
, the government
has made a law to restrict their community for
buying a Change preposition
from
house
with the aim of the land could be handled by the government
in order to make the country
is
comfortable to Unnecessary verb
apply
life
Replace the word
live
because
the Change preposition
in because
government
can develop and redesign in the future. For example
, Singapore have
already made a rule to restrict their community to own their Change the verb form
has
house
and for those who are interested to buy, they have to pass the requirement made by the minister. As a result
, the government
can develop their country
including augmenting infrastructures or transportation.
To sum up
, the reason why people nowadays buying
their houses Wrong verb form
buy
because
they want to do an investment and Add a missing verb
is because
also
it gives more space for them such
as a
privacy and they are not ruled by anyone. Remove the article
apply
However
, in small
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a small
the small
country
, it could induce a negative situation because of land limitations.Submitted by farel2300 on
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