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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion. You should write at least 250 words

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Developed countries have more exposure
toward
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 technology and they are using these advanced techniques to train their sportsmen to achieve maximum skills
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 other countries do not have
such
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 facilities.
This
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 essay will elaborate on its important and some detrimental effects. As far as my opinion is concerned it affects the merit of sports.
To begin
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 with,
providig
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providing
 extra
skill
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skills
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 by investing more is important to win the
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mega
 events. To explicate it, in the world, there is a
alot
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a lot
lot
 of
compitition
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competition
 among the
players
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, everyone is trying to attain
maximan skil
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maximum skill
, so if a nation is utilizing more
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technique
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techniques
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 to grow their
players
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 it is justifiable because they are using
trick
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 and ways to train them in front of all. It's not something
that
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is hide
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. For
instant
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, in Pakistan cricket
players
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 were trained with the help of using different technology and even some time, they sent
them
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in
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 the camp
of
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army
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the army
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, where they got proper
treatement
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treatment
 to make themself healthy.
Hance
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, it is the need of hours to make some extra
effert
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effort
 to
compeate
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compete
 the world. To commence with, unequal distributions of resources among the athletes create unfair
compitition
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competition
. To illustrate it, more
train
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players
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 will
definately
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definitely
 perform well because they
knows
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 all the trick, and
well
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are well
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 aware,
how
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of how
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 to encounter
with
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the pressure of
game
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.
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, it is very important to provide them with equal opportunities, so that
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standered
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standard
 of sport should
be maintain
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. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying, both
the
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viewpoints are discussed with relevant arguments.
However
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, I personally, subscribe to the view that
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to make healthy
compitition
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competition
 in sports, it is important to provide them with equal facilities.

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