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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion?

#people #jobs #robots
According to
 a few individuals, artificial intelligence
replace
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humans
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human
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 being
from
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 many workplaces. Some
jobs
 will be replaced by technology but the
works
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 where
person
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 contact is needed can not be overcome by
machine
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machines
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.
This
 essay will elaborate,
why
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 some
jobs
 will always be carried by humans.
To begin
 with,
non technical
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jobs
 can be occupied by artificial intelligence. To explicate
it
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, many companies do not hire workers for
a projects
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projects
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 where no need
of
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 human thinking and analytical skills.
For instance
, in the supermarkets of
Pakistan
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 all the work is done by automatic system. The shopper just
push
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 a button and they get their desired items.
Thus
 robots
are mostly use
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 in the world where
person
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personal
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 skills are not needed. To commence with, in which
human
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humans
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 are directly involved can not be done by robots. To illustrate it, in many
cases
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person
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 struggle is required like they take an object and
transfered
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transferred
transfer
 it to another location
that
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 can not be done without people.
Furthermore
, maps can only guide
about
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the
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directions but can not drive the car.
Similaraly
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Similarly
, in many fields of life, human investment is
basic
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a basic
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 element. Teaching is
an
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 epitome of occupation, in which only
teacher
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 can guide a student to improve their manners and other ethic by setting practical examples. To make
long
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 story short,
machine
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machines
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 are able to take away the role of
human
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humans
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 from all aspects of life, they have only
lemited
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limited
 success. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying, it is expected that artificial intelligence will eliminate public from the
emplyment
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employment
.
However
, I personally, subscribe to the view that it can only reverse
human
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humans
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 from certain positions
while
 most of the
jobs
 where direct involvement of
a
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apply
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people is needed can't be done by robots.

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