It is important fot children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers ne allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

It is argued that
children
should be taught from the early stages of life
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what is right and what is wrong, and as the term of
this
statement, some people would highly recommend punishment as a significant tool.
Although
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agree that there should be some methods of nurturing them, I think using penalty as a
controling
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controlling
object might just have detrimental consequences on
children
's life. The first point to take into account is conducting new
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approaches
,
thus
, the encouraging ones. What I mean is,
instead
of
scolting
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scouting
scolding
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youngsters for their false behaviour, it is more beneficial to encourage them into doing positive activities which can help them improve their
competance
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competence
competency
and
charecters
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character
.
For example
, parents and instructors play a crucial role in teaching them how to be
kind-hearted
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person
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their actions, and at the same time, they can state the negative side of
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cruelty
. The second point is that penalizing
children
can have
a
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harmful and
inevitible
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inevitable
effects on their mentality and spiritual aspects or even on their physical status.
In other words
, by remarking and highlighting the negative features of your child, you would merely
supress
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suppress
their emotions and
also
their self-confidence.
Furthermore
, a number of
children
can lose their physical ability and face some serious flaws
as a result
of
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body punishment. In conclusion, a majority of people still think that
scolting
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scouting
is necessary
while
rising up your youngster,
however
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I firmly believe that there are some other ways to help them distinguish the difference between false and right.
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