In recent years children have been given more freedom than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give your opinion and examples.

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Freedom is a right for everybody. But, for ,kids we should take care of the free life that they had. Because more freedom can affect them in a bad way. Some kids nowadays have bad behaviour and less knowledge because of free time. We can see that in our environment. First of all, free time without having a plan can make any person bad in many things,

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, I have one of my friends whose father is very rich, he

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him anything he

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since he was young. Sadly, that makes him unreliable. Another thing is he does not work or study.

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, he starts to hang out with bad people

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he is always sad because he does not have a goal.

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, there are several good people in our community

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are related to their parents.

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, if we make our children busy with education, sports, and fun. They will become successful in the future.

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, my little brother, is studying in the morning, he plays football after none, and at night he just has an hour to watch television or use his smartphone. In that case, he will never become a lazy or negative person. In conclusion, We have to know that more free

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worse than being busy with friends or family.

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but not least, we should make a balance between fun and study for our baby and for ourselves. In ,fact our kids act like us and we are their heroes.

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