The diagram below shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The diagram below shows the process by which milk and related products are produced.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The process diagram reveals the stages involved in the production of dairy and its products.
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,there are eight different stages involved in the manufacturing of milk.The first four take place on the farm
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the
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four is been done in the factory.
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with,in order to produce milk there must be a healthy cow which must be well fed with grass.Once the cow is satisfied,the milking machine help to get enough dairy from the bull which is been stored in the refrigerator in order to prevent it from getting spoiled and
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to preserve its nutrient before taking it to the mill. The tanker helps to transport the product to the factory where
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processing takes place. During the cost of transportation, the driver is very careful so as not to spill any of the products or run into any accidents before getting to the warehouse.
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,once it gets to the mill,it undergoes some processing before they are been pasteurized and packed into different containers .Some are been used to make cheese,cream and butter.These butter are
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used as oil for cooking.Cheese is a good source of protein which can be eaten with rice.These packaged goods are been sent to the supermarket for consumers to purchase.Retailers go there to buy and sell in small quantities for those that are unable to buy in bulk.
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