Task 1 The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features

Task 1

The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features
The diagram reveals the phases involved in the production of dairy products.
Overall
, it was shown that dairy goods must pass through 8 different stages to be produced for consumption.
This
is done on the farm and in the factory.
To begin
with, the first stage involves the rearing of healthy cows on the farm which is called cow grazing in the image provided. It was shown that
after
this
process, milking equipment will be used in collecting milk from the cow in the morning and in the evening which is twice daily on the farm.Moreso, milk collected will be refrigerated in order to preserve and prevent it from spoilage which will be later transferred to the diary for pasteurization in order to make products
such
as yoghurt, cheese etc
Furthermore
, these goods
such
as butter and cheese will later be packaged into attractive containers or wraps which is done in the factory to make them more valuable and attractive to customers.
After
this
is done different dairy products produced will
then
be distributed to different wholesale and retail shops.
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