The diagram below shows the process of milk production
The process diagram illustrates the
steps
involved in the manufaction
of dairy and related varieties
Correct your spelling
manufacture
Overall
, there are eight steps
involved in the production of milk
. The first four steps
takes
place on the farm Change the verb form
take
while
the final steps
took place at the factory
To start with, healthy farm cattles
are reared and made to eat grass in an open field to enable them Correct your spelling
cattle
make
adequate Add the particle
to make
milk
. After which the milk making
machine Add a hyphen
milk-making
extract
Correct subject-verb agreement
extracts
milk
from the cows twice a day. Furthermore
, the extracted milk
are
stored in a refrigerator in order to prevent spoilage. The extracted diary is Change the verb form
is
then
transported by a van to the factory for the second stage.
At the factory, the milk
is transferred into a machine which separates it into milk
, cheese, cream and butter. Subsequently
, the milk
is pasteurized and packaged in various bottles. The packaged products are then
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