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The pictures explain the production of cement and concrete Summaries this by comparing and explaining the processes involved

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The diagram illustrates the steps and materials needed in the production of
cement
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 and how it can
also
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 be used to make concrete.
It is clear that
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 there are 5 steps in the manufacturing of
cement
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while
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 there are 4 stages involved in the production of concrete.Beginning with the input of raw materials and ending with the bag of finished products.
At the first stage
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 of
cement
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 manufacturing,limestone and clay were crushed together into powdery form and poured into the mixer before moving to the rotating heater.After heating,the mixture is poured into the grinder where it is grounded and comes out as
cement
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 which will be poured and packaged into bags. For the manufacturing of concrete,
cement
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 is one of the four materials used.It was mixed with water which makes up 10%, sand making up 25% and gravel 50% having the largest percentage.They are all poured into the concrete mixer which will mix them all in a rotating motion to form concrete.

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