There is an annual work party next month, which is held every year. Write a letter to your colleagues to co-arrange the party. In your letter: •Say what would you do differently than last year •Say what you think were some of the things not so good last year •Suggest where to meet to plan for the party.

My dear sir or madam colleagues, As you know, our yearly work party is coming soon.
This
tradition has become boring for everyone, including me. To be honest,
this
regular event feels annoying because we always do the same things every year. Nothing changes, and it feels repetitive. When I realized that
this
situation
doesn't
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work well anymore, I decided to take action to solve it. My suggestion is to change the plan
this
year.
Instead
of the usual event, let's go together to a beautiful lake and have a barbecue. We can meet in front of the business apartment, and I have already rented a bus. I
also
arranged for a guitarist to join us.
This
musician will escort us, and we can enjoy music on the way.
For preparing
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this
organization and
making
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it a success, I am waiting for everyone's support. I hope we can make
this
year’s event fun and different. Best regards.
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task achievement
Try to provide a bit more detail about the areas that were not so good last year.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea for better clarity.
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You provided a clear suggestion for improving the party this year.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear beginning and a respectful closing.

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