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Environmental problems such as pollution and climatic variations are increasing nowadays. The governments have taken some measures at a global level. But they got only few solutions. Why is it so? How can this problem be solved?

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Nowadays
evological
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ecological
 disadvantages that make
environment
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the environment
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dosessemble
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disassemble
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 occur very quickly on the earth.
This
 essay
itends
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intends
 that look at the
environment
 carefully and suggest some solutions to mitigate the problem. Despite the
governments
 have found some measures at
aglobal
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global
 level, reasons
of
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for
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 the pollution and climatic variations are appearing everywhere and every time again and again. But mostly
this
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these
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 problems arise mainly in the
country-side
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countryside
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. The first reason why global measures have failed is that the
governments
 are building
the
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cement plants and plants which
is
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are
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 like
this
 in the village
which
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where
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population
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the population
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 live.
This
 situation damage not only
environment
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the environment
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,
even people
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but even people also
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suffer
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 from it.
Besides
 the developed world is shying away from the burden it needs to bear for the damage it did to the
environment
 in the colonial industrial revolution times. The second major
reasons
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reason
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that
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is that
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 our
governments
 are acting in the interests of powerful lobbies and corporations. And until they find the problem solution of the pollution
are
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 getting stronger. And they are not solved betimes.
Although
 solutions are not
sipmle
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simple
, a solution can be found. The builds that bring the
debit
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debt
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 to the state but bring the pollution to the
environment
 have to be built
to
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in
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 uninhabited remote areas and
in
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to
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solve
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 the problem, the
governments
 must try to very quickly on
its
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their
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 own. But It can not just say that everyone should play an equal role. It can do so by providing wealth and technology related to renewable sources of energy to
the
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developing and the least developed countries. Summing up everyone must know
responsibilities
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their responsibilities
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about
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regarding
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environment
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the environment
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. We must all play our part- individual citizens and
governments
 at the national and international level
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