Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Generally, all
peoples
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people
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buy some
products
not only seen of the
price
but
also
the
quality
of the
product
. I think it’s
totally
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a totally
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negative development if
people
are able to buy the same
products
anywhere in the
world
to make the
countries
more similar. In fact, every
product
in any
country
has its own
characteristic
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characteristics
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from the
quality
or
price
depend
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depending
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on the target market
although
it is the same
product
.
First,
every
country
in the
world
has its characteristic
product
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products
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with their
quality
and
price
.
However
, there is always good
quality
.
For example
, all
people
come into the mall to buy some shirts or jeans from a brand from
the other
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another
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country
because it
has
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is
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a
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of
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good
quality
but a little bit expensive for the
price
.
However
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there is so many
brand
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brands
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form
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from
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our
countries
that
not
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are not
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popular
whereas
it
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they
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have
a
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apply
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good
quality
also
.
Secondly
, the
price
of the
products
in
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apply
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anywhere in the
world
is too expensive
then
our
country
. I think
its
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it
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depend
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depends
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from
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on
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the
quality
. In
this
case, many artists in our
country
buy some bags from a popular brand
with
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at
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the
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a
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very expensive
price
. Because they have their own ego enhancement to buy expensive
products
and look glamour with us that
products
.
in addition
in our
country
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country,
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there must
also
products
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be products
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with
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of
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good
quality
and
price
that they need.
Finally
, all
people
must
proud
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be proud
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and
used
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use
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our
products
to increase the development of the
countries
. It is clear I think
its
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it is
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negative
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a negative
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development if
countries
are becoming more and more similar if
people
are able to buy the same
products
anywhere in the
world
. All
people
in our
country
must be looking forward to potential
products
that they have in their own
countries
with good
quality
and
price
also
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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