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It has been said, "Not all learning takes place in the classroom." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from personal experience with knowledge gained from classroom instruction. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?

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theoretical
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 people that can teach him better
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, teens and adults it's normal
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 that they Will
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 of
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 their minds to new
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first
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 it's true You Will learn indispensable
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write
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 You Will learn a
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 of
things
 that maybe You won't need again.
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 know how an
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knowing
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 Will not help you unless it has to do with your profession. (129) There are a
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 of
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places
 and people who can teach You better
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 your life like how to pay your taxes or
things
 like how to Cook, how to drive and who could be better than our grandparents who already live and
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know a lot
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esencial
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special
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 is important for your
lives
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although
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school because You don't need it, the Best could be
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 explore and así about the world, SO
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that's
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things
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