Some people like to travel to somewhere new and different when they go on holiday, while others prefer familiar places. Do you think there are more advantages and disadvantages to visiting new places?

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try to go somewhere after

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work, or study

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have a rest. Some

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people

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want to familiar

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for

holiday

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a holiday

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but a large number of

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want to see new

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. Visiting new

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have

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more advantages and disadvantages. I will explain my perspective in my essay. Everyone

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to go

new

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to new

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places

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on holiday. Because when

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go to new

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people

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can meet many advantages in there.

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can make

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new friends. On top of that,

people

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learn

foreign

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about foreign

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culture

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cultures

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with new friends and they can exchange

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with other

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.when you visit new

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, you can exchange

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with the

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there and

thus

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you come home with new

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. You can bring these

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into your lifestyle. Visiting new

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can

also

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be challenging.

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, when you visit new

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, you first need to know the local language. and for

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you need to have enough information about that country and know the language before going to another country.

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, you can get carried away by emotions

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as cultural shock,

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. It destroys

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's confidence.

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, it is necessary to know exactly what

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condition

is necessary to know the laws and regulations there. but if he does not know the

rules

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, he will face many difficulties and will be held responsible if the

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are broken.

people

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are in when they do not have accurate information about new

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, and

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, appropriate actions can be taken.It is necessary to know the laws and regulations there. but if he does not know the

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, he will face many difficulties and will be held responsible if the

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are broken.

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a consequence, when

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visiting

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new

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on holiday first of all they need to learn any information about their new

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.if you know the place well you won't have much trouble.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

320 words

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Some people like to travel to somewhere new and different when they go on holiday, while others prefer familiar places. Do you think there are more advantages and disadvantages to visiting new places?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people say in order to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems.

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