Some people like to travel to somewhere new and different when they go on holiday, while others prefer familiar places. Do you think there are more advantages and disadvantages to visiting new places?

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people
try to go somewhere after
the
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work, or study
for
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have a rest. Some
kind
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of
people
want to familiar
places
for
holiday
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a holiday
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but a large number of
people
want to see new
places
. Visiting new
places
have
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more advantages and disadvantages. I will explain my perspective in my essay. Everyone
want
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to go
new
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to new
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places
on holiday. Because when
people
go to new
places
people
can meet many advantages in there.
For example
,
people
can make
a
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new friends. On top of that,
people
learn
foreign
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culture
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cultures
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with new friends and they can exchange
ideas
with other
people
.when you visit new
places
, you can exchange
ideas
with the
people
there and
thus
you come home with new
ideas
. You can bring these
ideas
into your lifestyle. Visiting new
places
can
also
be challenging.
For example
, when you visit new
places
, you first need to know the local language. and for
this
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you need to have enough information about that country and know the language before going to another country.
secondly
, you can get carried away by emotions
such
as cultural shock,
that is
, fear,
depression
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. It destroys
people
's confidence.
in addition
, it is necessary to know exactly what
conditioIt
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condition
is necessary to know the laws and regulations there. but if he does not know the
rules
, he will face many difficulties and will be held responsible if the
rules
are broken.
people
are in when they do not have accurate information about new
places
, and
accordingly
, appropriate actions can be taken.It is necessary to know the laws and regulations there. but if he does not know the
rules
, he will face many difficulties and will be held responsible if the
rules
are broken.
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a consequence, when
people
visiting
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new
places
on holiday first of all they need to learn any information about their new
places
.if you know the place well you won't have much trouble.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Finally
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