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Although there has been a significant increase in agricultural advancements, a number of people across the world are striving for food. This is mainly because of increase of population and loss of soil fertility. There are numerous solutions to deal with hunger problem all over the world

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Recent technological advancements can make the productivity of agricultural crops and boost the
number of
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population.
However
, despite
of
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increasing
food
 production, many
people
 in
the
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developing
countries
 suffer from
starving
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starvation
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 or need more
food
.
Althoug
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Although
 it is difficult to tackle the issue, we can make a deal with it through
the
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cooperation between
the
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developing
countries
 and developed
countries
. Compared to the past,
output
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 of
food
skyrocket
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 surprisingly,
however
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 the rate of
food
 production can not catch up with the speed of
increasing
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 population.
Consequently
, there are many
people
 that suffer from the lack of
food
 and they are starving now. Though it is a serious problem to solve, we can handle it through the cooperation of
countries
. Usually starvation occurs in poor
countries
.
Furthermore
, in developed
countries
, much more crops are left.
This
 unbalanced situation should be resolved by donations
of
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 developed
countries
.
Moreover
, international organizations should make an effort to
mediat
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mediate
 between developing
countries
 and developed
countries
.
Foe
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 example, in developed and rich
countries
, there were several events, especially
such
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as "save children in Africa" event. Many celebrities like singers participated in the event and eventually raised much money.
Nevertheless
, it was
temporarily
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 to
sove
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solve
save
 the issue. So as a view of humanism, regular
system
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systems
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 like
food
bank
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banks
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 to raise funds for starving
people
 should be made by international organizations and rich
countries
, which can help
people
 in poverty.
To sum up
, it is not
easy
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 way to solve
hunger
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the hunger
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 problem.
Meanwhile
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 it is not
impossible
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an impossible
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 issue to handle it. Through raising funds and donations around the world,
people
 who are hungry can get
a
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aid and come over the hardship.
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