The charts below show local government expenditure in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show local government expenditure in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the information of
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local government spending in two separate years, in 2010 and 2015.
Overall
, what stands out from these graphs is that
although
the
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general
distribution for each
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was almost identical, we can see the major growth
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warefare
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defence
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budget
which decreased its figure through the 5 years.
To begin
with the figures of the
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three
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of using
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budget, namely, education, healthcare and pension in that order,
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kept their attached priority ranged between 19% and 25% throughout the designated period. Interestingly, transport, recreation and other sectors
also
remained their trend to be
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uncommon way of spending the government's
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expenditure
, whose figure
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at more or less 2%.
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to the remaining proportion regarding defence,
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welfare
and bank interest,
whereas
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their
total figure marginally varied, their breakdown experienced a slight change in the
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.
While
there was
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%
defference
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difference
between defence and
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welfare
warfare
in 2010, the latter's
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number
became quite as high
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as the former's five years later.
On the other hand
, interest doubled from 5% to 10% in 2015.
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