The charts below show local government expenditure in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the information of
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local government spending in two separate years, in 2010 and 2015.
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Overall
, what stands out from these graphs is that although
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distribution for each Correct your spelling
general
categories
was almost identical, we can see the major growth Change to a singular noun
category
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number
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the number
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defence
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the defence
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which decreased its figure through the 5 years.
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budget
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with the figures of the dominated
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purposes
government
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the government
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also
remained their trend to be relatively
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a relatively
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, whose figure Correct your spelling
expenditure
were
at more or less 2%.
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to the remaining proportion regarding defence, Correct your spelling
Turning
walfare
and bank interest, Correct your spelling
welfare
whereas
thier
total figure marginally varied, their breakdown experienced a slight change in the Correct your spelling
their
half decade
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half-decade
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there was 9
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a 9
defference
between defence and Correct your spelling
difference
walfare
in 2010, the latter's Correct your spelling
welfare
warfare
nubmer
became quite as high Correct your spelling
number
percentage
as the former's five years later. Correct article usage
a percentage
On the other hand
, interest doubled from 5% to 10% in 2015.Submitted by lisa_smile_2 on
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