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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #money #railways #roads
Considerably, infrastructure is a key element for
improvement
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 of almost all cities. in
this
 respect, there is an opinion
assirting
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asserting
 that government must
investment
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invest
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 on railways than roadways. I,
however
, completely agree with the given argument on the basis of Its
benfits
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benefits
 for both government and
people
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the people
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.
Firstly
, the main reason is that it is
enviromentally-freindly
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environmentally-friendly
. To be
mare
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more
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 specific, in recent years renewable energy is used for train rather than fuels, which prevent
the
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air pollution.
Moreover
,
although
 People use cars for their daily commuting, the accessibility of a large number of them
however
 are provided by train to far
distance
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 locations
with
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 lower
Price
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.
Secondly
, in
compare
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 with
airplane
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airplanes
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 or
ship
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ships
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,
locomotive
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locomotives
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creats
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creates
create
 one of the cheapest moods of transportation
wich
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which
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 provides
connection
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a connection
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 between cities and countries. It means that if the authorities invest
money
 on it, it leads to saving a lot of
money
 for them. Japan which
due to
 considering a large amount of
money
 for railways, is one of the richest of
fist-world
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 countries, is a good example.
To conclude
, I personally take the view that
consumption
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the consumption
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 of
money
 for railroads will be more beneficial than roads for its advantages for the people who use them and
also
government
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the government
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.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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