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Development is fast growing, more and more machines are replacing humans. Does the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?. Discuss and give vital example. Write not less than 250 words.

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Introduction
Now a days
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 development is growing
a
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in a
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very faster way like more and more
machinesa
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machines
 are
replaceing
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replacing
the
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apply
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humans in
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works
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work
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. Or any other tasks
similarly
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 when we go
for
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to
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a
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apply
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work
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 we see
lost
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lots
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 of machines
are
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working apart from human workers.
Body paragraph 1
There are some advantages
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to
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 using
of
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apply
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electronic gadgets we will complete
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the task
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task
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 within a
time
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 and we will deliver
the
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 clients
intime
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in time
. If there are any heavy
work
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 human can't handle that the machinery will complete the
work
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.
Body paragraph 2
Some disadvantages
by
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apply
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replacing of electronic items without electricity
machinary
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machinery
there
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are there
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 are
lot
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a lot
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 of
works
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 are pending due
lack
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 of
time
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 and workers
then
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 we will
loss
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 our business or any other firms.
Body paragraph 3
Example
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For example
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: if
your
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you
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 are
customer
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a customer
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you
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who
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 ordered one mattress lack of
time
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along with
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works
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 are not come to
work
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 from past
work
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 one week your order got
stucked
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stuck
. That the staff has not informed you because
that
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they
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 said that they will complete your on
time
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 it is not done.mena
while
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 you call to
organisation
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the organisation
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 or any shop they said that
work
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 not completed because of
works
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 and machinery issue.
Conclusion
In
this
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case
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 we need
a machinery
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machinery
a piece of machinery
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as well as
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 manpower
in
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for
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work
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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