The bar chart below shows numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018.

The bar chart below shows numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018.
The given bar chart shows information about three various sea mammals
population
in the Gormez straits during the given 12-year time period. From the figure,
it is clear that
the
population
of these aquatic animals rose between the years,
while
some mild fluctuations between. As seen in the chart, in 2006, the most populated sea animal in the straits was seals and
this
peak
number
was more than two-fifths;
however
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its
population
fell steadily to almost a quarter in 2010.
Moreover
, between these two years, the
population
of whales and dolphins saw a slight climb. When the former’s
number
grew from 23 to 26, the latter’s
number
increased from 17 to 22. And during the given time period seals
population
saw significant growth from 25 to 44, and the figure for dolphins experienced a sharp climb from almost a fifth to around 52 between 2010 and 2018 .
Finally
, the total
number
of whales in the Gormez Straits was 28, which was just 6 more than in 2014.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • Recorded
  • Gormez Straits
  • Fluctuation
  • Seals
  • Whales
  • Dolphins
  • Height
  • Individuals
  • Steadily declined
  • Relatively stable
  • Lowest
  • Significant increase
  • Approximately
  • Slight recovery
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