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Some believe that students should begin learning a language very early in school while others think these subjects should be taught later. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that pupils would be better
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 at an early age in school,
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, Others believe
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 lesson should be learned
the other
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. Both views put forward valid points,
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, in my opinion, the former one is productive. In some areas, people have different types of
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, and one of them is more dominant than the others. Parents of those students would like to be taught
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 to their children from an early age
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 because they believe it is known as a cultural heritage and associate children with their identity. As students at an early stage of age have a fresh mind, they are more likely to educate every program straightforwardly.
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, learning
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 subject not only helps them to stick to their cultural heritage and understand their identity very early but
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 gives them an opportunity to feel a sense of unity with their peers.
On the other hand
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, since schools have a certain
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 and focus on some mandatory subjects,
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 as mathematics, science, history, art etc., they
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 allocate
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 to learning a lesson in
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, which is not compulsory because of
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, having
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 class means that they need to employ several teachers for different types of
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, which is not cost-effective for their officials. form their point of view these subjects should be taught as extracurricular lessons in some cultural exchange programs or private institutions. n conclusion, some feel that educating
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 to young children should not be done at school,
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, I think it would be practicable to
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this
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 kind of subject to pupils
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 the fact that they would be able to achieve a sense of unity and perception of identity.

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coherence cohesion
The essay contains relevant points but lacks proper development and organization. The introduction and conclusion are present, but the main points are not well supported, and the logic of the structure is weak.
task achievement
The essay partially responds to the task by presenting both views, but the ideas are not developed adequately. The examples provided are not specific enough to support the arguments. More comprehensive and clear ideas are needed to address the topic effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • cultural awareness
  • effective language acquisition
  • early exposure
  • natural pronunciation
  • intonation
  • foundational literacy skills
  • multilingual education
  • intensive study
  • foundational understanding
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