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We find many countries around the world, paying for things using mobile applications (cell phone) is becoming increasingly common, so do these developed applications have advantages? Does the use of these applications have disadvantages?

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In a somewhat futuristic world, e-commerce is growing day by day.
People
 tend to pay online (
bank
 card) rather than cash.
This
 article will essay on the benefits of mobile hardware software, plus there are more satisfactory advantages of
this
 technology than disadvantages. A cell phone with internet is better and hassle-free if used correctly.
First,
the schools
use
 a convenient and easy
payment
 method for parents to collect their monthly fees which is better than before, parents had to stand in long
also
 boring queues. The same is the case with paying utility bills.
This
payment
 method has saved us valuable time and effort.
Secondly
, every bady is possible to
use
 the applications in the developed phones at any time and anywhere in the world, just connect to the internet
also
 enter the program.
Finally
,
bank
 transfers to one of my sons are easier over the phone
also
 do not take time,
as well as
bank
 statements for the withdrawal process, which I can see immediately. There are more disadvantages that make
people
 stay away from using mobile
payment
 software.
First,
people
's fear of cybercrime spread in social media, which calls for the
use
 of money to pay, to feel safe.
Secondly
, it is difficult for the elderly to
use
 the developed cell phones
also
 their many programs, so we find that he always withdraws money from the
bank
 and puts it at home.
Finally
, constant fear of a sudden interruption of the internet, and the cancellation of transfers of huge sums of money. In conclusion, it can be emphasized that cashless
payment
 has more advantages than disadvantages. With each passing day, online
payment
 guarantees
due to
 more certain.
As a result
, there will be fewer security breaches and an improvement in
people
's trust in
this
 method.
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