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■The chart below give information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. ■Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

■The chart below give information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. ■Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates, during the
period
 between 1990 and 2010, the proportion of the amount given to
charity
 by British citizens.
Overall
, the Blue bar represents the
period
 from 1990 and the orange colour bar is 2010.
According to
 the graph,
it is clear that
,
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 middle
age
people
 provided more amount in the
period
 1990,
while
 youngsters gave
money
 to
charity
 is less in the
year
 2010.
To begin
 with, starts with the
age
 range 18-25, both the
year
 only a few
people
 contribute amount to the
charity
.
That is
 17% in 1990 and 6% in 2010.
Furthermore
, in 1990 only 31% of
people
, which are between the
age
 of 26-35, gives
money
 to welfare and
also
 near to 25% of individuals in 2010. In the beginning
period
, in the
age
 range of 36-50, 44% of humans paid
money
 to
charity
.
As well as
 in 2010, significantly it went down and reach 35%.
However
, In the old
age
that is
 51-65, In the
year
 1990, 35% of
people
 contribute
money
 to
charity
.
Whereas
 in 2010, it increased to 4% which is 39%.
Last
 but not least,
those
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 above 65
age
, residents spend
money
 on
charity
 about 34% in the
year
 1990 and 35% in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, charity, age, people, money, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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