Some people think that watching sport is a waste of time during leisure time. ‎To what extent do you agree or disagree?‎

Sports
have always been
a
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greatest pursuit,
also
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and also
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serves
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as
entertainment
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an entertainment
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medium
in
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every age group. Some people prefer to
binge watch
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favorite
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sports
games
on television in their leisure time. I completely disagree with
this
statement and shall put forth my views in
this
essay.
Firstly
, there are multiple
games
that need to be played and have
similar
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a similar
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kick of enthusiasm as watching like board
games
, card
games
, snooker and
play
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playing
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station.
Although
, PS5 or PlayStation has more popularity among
younger
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the younger
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population. These
games
are
also
beneficial for their cognitive development as it increases concentration and focus. For
instances
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, in a recent surveillance study in America students were analyzed for their IQ and focus test and it turns out that gaming minds have shown more alertness and active neurons than the rest. Another perspective
is experience
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,
that
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which
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can only be learnt
by
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through
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personal struggles. It's even important to strive harder
while
playing
sports
to be
master
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in the
battle field
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battlefield
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by practicing regularly to achieve
highest
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the highest
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rank of the player's table.
Hence
,
athlete
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the athlete
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gets
famous
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more famous
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by pursuing
games
than
to watch
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watching
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. To illustrate, Christiano Ronaldo, a young soccer player, won all the titles of
Premier
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the Premier
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league
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League
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and sets a benchmark for its competitor and got rewarded. In conclusion, many people can show engagement in relaxing time either by
play
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station or any other
sports
because no pain no gain, without struggles nothing is impossible.
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