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Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet.Do you agree or disagree?

#meat #diet
Due to
 laws and regulations, we are not stopping anyone to eat non-vegetarian. Most
people
 get protein from vegetarian
food
 without consuming non-veg. I agree with the given notion that everyone should prefer
vegetarian
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vegetarianism
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 to be healthy. In
this
 essay, I intend to support my opinion with my perspective.
That is
 not deniable that there are numerous benefits to taking vegan
food
. To explain it, A lot of proteins and
fibers
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fibres
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 are available in vegetarian
food
 for a healthy life. It is easy to digest for our body so that
people
 cannot suffer from illnesses
such
 as the liver and many other organs. These kinds of products are easily available in the market like fresh vegetables and fresh dairy products.
For instance
, in India, 70% of
people
 who wrestle perform well without non-veg.
As a result
,
people
 can live a healthier life without
meat
.
Moreover
, most
people
 in Asian
countries
 prefer veg
food
 because it is affordable compared with
meat
. Much veg
food
 has more protein
instead
 of eating
meat
. If a person has a number of illnesses, they prefer to eat green vegetables by which a lot of illnesses are cured.
On the other hand
, everyone cannot live without non-vegetarian
food
.
For example
, in Western
countries
,
people
 want to eat
meat
 to survive because the temperature is too cold
such
 as -20 degrees more in which they cannot work without warming their bodies. Non-veg
food
 has a lot of proteins and
fibers
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fibres
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 but it takes difficult to digest. Sometimes
people
 sell their outdated or spoiled chicken which is annoying.
People
 can find easily nonveg shops in Western
countries
 but it becomes difficult to find vegan shops. In conclusion,
although
 a non-vegetarian diet has necessary for many
countries
, I support those who say they everyone should turn vegetarian to be healthy.
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