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the graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarize the main features and make comparison where relevant.

the graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarize the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
waste
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 generated between 2000 and 2015 by companies A, B, and C.
Overall
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, the amount of
waste
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 produced in both
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company
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companies
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 A and B declined.
Whereas
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,
company
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 C had a significant increase over the period given.
Initially
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,
company
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 A started with the highest
number
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 of
waste
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 which is 12
tonnes
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 in 2000.
Then
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, it slowly fell by reaching 8
tonnes
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at the end
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 of the period. On the other side,
company
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 B reached a peak
on
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 managing trash in 2005 by 10
tonnes
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. After that, it had
dramatic
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a dramatic
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 fall in 2015 reaching just 3
tonnes
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 which
the
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is the
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 lowest
number
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 among the three companies.
On the other hand
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,
company
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 C has a different pattern. It steadily increased the
number
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 of
the
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apply
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waste
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 generated reaching 10
tonnes
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 by the end of the period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, waste, company, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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