The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given flowchart describes how
sugar
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is made from
sugar
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cane
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simply with several visualized images.
Overall
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, a complete circle process consists of seven steps, from growing
sugar
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cane
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to drying till
sugar
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.
To begin
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with, farmers have to spend twelve to eighteen months growing a mature
sugar
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cane
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enough.
Then
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, there will be two methods to harness the
sugar
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cane
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field. They may use specially designed harvesting machines or manually harvest by hand with a sharp blade and cut the
cane
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body above the ground. After that,
sugar
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cane
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will be put in a crushing machine to be crushed into juice. Before syrup, the juice needs to be purified by a limestone filter. Later, it will be heated by an evaporator to turn the juice into syrup.
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a centrifuge will be used to separate
sugar
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crystals from
syrup
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the syrup
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.
Finally
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, the final product, carbohydrate, will be seen after drying and cooling for a particular time.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, cane with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • mature
  • harvest
  • extract
  • purification
  • impurities
  • evaporation
  • thick syrup
  • crystallization
  • centrifugation
  • molasses
  • raw sugar crystals
  • refinement
  • purify
  • whiten
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