Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

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According to
a few
people
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kids should be sent to
others
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countries because it is
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beneficial
for them.
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essay will illustrate its merits and demerits. As for as my opinion is concerned it
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more advantages. To start with, it is quite expensive to educate children from foreign counties. To explicate it, there
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the cast of travelling and living when moving to other states
that
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really
burden
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on
parent
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the parent
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.
Similiarly
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Similarly
, youngsters have
imature
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immature
mature
mind
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and they will indulge in negative activities
instead
of focusing on their goals. So, they must be kept in parental care.
For instance
, one of my class
fellow
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was moved to China for matric
education
but he had involved in drinking
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alcohol
alcohols
, and
finally
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he came back even without completing school
education
.
Hence
, teachers and
parent
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should be very reluctant, when they are making
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decisions
decision
about their
children
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education
. To commence with, some teachers suggest that
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pupils
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get more knowledge when they complete their studies from other nations. To explicate it, they will have encountered with many
differents
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cultralal
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cultural
culturally
varities
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varieties
. How it is possible that
this
magnanimous experience will not enhance their creativity?
Moreover
, if they will face different problems during that journey, it will help them not only become proactive but
also
make them able to face challenges.
Therefore
, students who are educated
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different countries will earn more skills and
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. To put it
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I pen down saying, both the benefits and detrimental
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were discussed with relevant arguments.
However
, I
subcribe
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subscribe
to the view that
multicultral
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multicultural
experience is more important, which can only
be earn
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after getting
education
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an education
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via international
students
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student
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exchange program.

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