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Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages? According to a few people, kids should be sent to other countries because it is the benefical for them.This essay will illustrate its merits and demerits. As for as my opinion is concerned it has more advantages.

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To start with, it is quite expensive to educate children from foreign counties. To explicate it, there is the cast of travelling and living when moving to other states
that is
 really a burden on
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.
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Similarly
, youngsters have
imature
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immature
mature
 minds and they will indulge in negative activities
instead
 of focusing on their goals. So, they must be kept in parental care.
For instance
, one of my class fellows was moved to China for matric
education
 but he had involved in drinking
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alcohol
alcohols
, and
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 he came back even without completing school
education
.
Hence
, teachers and parents should be very reluctant, when they are making
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decisions
decision
 about their
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education
. To commence with, some teachers suggest that
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pupils
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 get more knowledge when they complete their studies from other nations. To explicate it, they will have encountered with many
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cultralal
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cultural
culturally
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varieties
. How it is possible that
this
 magnanimous experience will not enhance their creativity?
Moreover
, if they will face different problems during that journey, it will help them not only become proactive but
also
 make them able to face challenges.
Therefore
, students who are educated
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 different countries will earn more skills and
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. To put it
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 I pen down saying, both the benefits and detrimental
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 were discussed with relevant arguments.
However
, I
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subscribe
 to the view that
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multicultural
 experience is more important, which can only
be earn
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 after getting
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an education
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 via international
students
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student
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 exchange program.

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