Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages? According to a few people, kids should be sent to other countries because it is the benefical for them.This essay will illustrate its merits and demerits. As for as my opinion is concerned it has more advantages.

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To start with, it is quite expensive to educate children from foreign counties. To explicate it, there is the cast of travelling and living when moving to other states
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really a burden on
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, youngsters have
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of focusing on their goals. So, they must be kept in parental care.
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, one of my class fellows was moved to China for matric
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but he had involved in drinking
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he came back even without completing school
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, teachers and parents should be very reluctant, when they are making
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education
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. To commence with, some teachers suggest that
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get more knowledge when they complete their studies from other nations. To explicate it, they will have encountered with many
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cultural
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varieties
. How it is possible that
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magnanimous experience will not enhance their creativity?
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, if they will face different problems during that journey, it will help them not only become proactive but
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make them able to face challenges.
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, students who are educated
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different countries will earn more skills and
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. To put it
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I pen down saying, both the benefits and detrimental
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were discussed with relevant arguments.
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, I
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to the view that
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multicultural
experience is more important, which can only
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after getting
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via international
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exchange program.

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