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The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarize the information by reporting the main features

The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarize the information by reporting the main features
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The given diagram illustrates the process of producing
milk
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 and dairy
products
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.
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,it involves 8 stages ranging from cow raring to the supply of the finished
products
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 to the supermarket for sales and consumption.
To begin
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 with,
this
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 involves 2 stages which are the first stage is
in
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on
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 the farm and the second in the factory.
Firstly
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 healthy cows are rare in the farms to reproductive stage. The Lactating herds are milked daily in the mornings and evenings with the aid of
milking
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a milking
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 machine. The
milk
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are
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is
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 collected and
storef
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stored
 in the refrigerator for presentation.
Thereafter
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,the
milk
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 is transported to the factory with a
milk
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 tanker for onward processing. In the factory, dairy
products
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, cream,butter and cheese are extracted
from
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apply
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and the
milk
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 is
further
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 preserved by the process of Pasteurization.
However
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, the
milk
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 and
it's
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its
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products
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 are ready for consumption and are sent to the supermarket for
sales
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sale
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 to consumers.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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