Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugar products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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and cause

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problems for

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argue that the government should increase the tax

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sugar

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to encourage

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to

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use less

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approach is practice, there are other methods better than it . Admittedly, proponents of

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effective to reduce the quantity of

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using

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is that if government lead the higher

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of

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,

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when customers want to buy them , they would find that the products are more expensive. It

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not worth

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these goods . So, People’s life could be healthier because they eat less sweets and more

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health

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foods and drinks.

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,

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the method is useful , it is

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unfair and has a negative impact on the market. For some people especially

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the community who only use

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in a

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limited

quantity, it is

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unjustifiable

for them to spend more money on daily

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products.

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, there are too many products using the

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. If the

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of

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rise

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, these

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price

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prices

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would rise too.

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life

expencies

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would be much higher than before. So

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suggest

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a rule for the

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company about how

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sugar

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they are allowed to use . The product

contain

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less

sugar

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could

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let

coustomers

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customers

become more healthy.

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, the government could start

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class

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to teach students to know what

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of food

are

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suitable and

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health

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for them,

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, they would eat less

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to adapt

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and other

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problems. In conclusion, It’s true that

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sugar’s

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price

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prices

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can

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people’s cost

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sugar

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., but it is unjustified for a part of people and the markets. Some other ways like teaching

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tips and limiting

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using

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of

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companies are more useful e and fair.