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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram illustrates the development of
ground
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the ground
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 floor in certain buildings from 1958 to
present
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the present
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the pictures that there are three stages of
reconstructed
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reconstruction
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 in terms of
year
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a year
the year
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,
started
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starting
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 from 1958-1984
that
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apply
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was an
office
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,
1985
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in 1985
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-2000 turned
out to
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into
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apartment
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an apartment
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, and
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lastly
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,lastly
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 2001-present become a flower shop. To commence, there are
noticable
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noticeable
 from the development of
this
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 building that the entrance and the kitchen remained the same over the period.
However
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, in 1985-19984 there was an
office
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 which had seven rooms and the opposite was a meeting
room
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. A
manager
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manager's
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office
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located
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is located
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 between
kitchen
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the kitchen
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 and reception
area
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.
Moreover
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, there was a toilet in the southwest near the entrance.
Subsequently
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, there were
assistant's
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an assistant's
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office
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 and
secretary's
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a secretary's
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office
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 in front of
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the manager
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manager
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manager's
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office
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. Turning to 1985-2000,
this
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office
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 is renovated
became
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and became
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 an apartment. The meeting
room
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 from the lastest
bulding
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building
 is changed into
living
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the living
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room
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,
while
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 the toilet is expanded to bathroom and shower. In the east part of
this
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 building, there were
a
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apply
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bedroom 1 and
berdroom
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bedroom
 2, which replaced the
manager
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manager's
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office
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 and reception
area
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.
In
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From
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 2001-nowadays, an apartment is converted
to
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into
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 a flower shop which has 4 areas. The bathroom and shower
room
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is
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are
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 demolished and turned into a play
area
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.
Similary
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Similarly
,
the
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apply
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bedroom 1 is replaced into an
office
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.
Likewise
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,
living
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the living
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room
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 in the northeast of the latest building is made into a gift cards
area
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.
In addition
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, bedroom 2 is pulled down
become
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to become
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 a flower
area
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.
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