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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two diagrams illustrate
road
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 access to a town hospital in 2007 and the
changed
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change
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 in 2010
Overall
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, the city hospital map in 2010 reveals a positive change, which solved some traffic congestion and offered more convenience to people who use public transport to access the hospital. In 2007, the city hospital used to have one straight entry
road
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, staff
car
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park
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 including
public
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a public
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car
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park
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 was located in the same place.
Besides
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, Bus stops were
by
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on
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 both sides of the hospital
road
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. By 2010, the capital hospital built a new public
car
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park
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 on the east side of the hospital and
staff
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the staff
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car
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park
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 was expanded where it used to be. The greatest change is that the bus stops were removed and relocated into a big station by the hospital
road
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.
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, the main development is that two roundabouts were added
on
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to
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 the city
road
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 square and the second one was placed on a hospital ring
road
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. Both solutions could positively reduce traffic congestion on the hospital route and could prevent people and staff
getting
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from getting
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accidents
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into accidents
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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