Although access to medicine is improving, lifestyle related health problems exist in many countries. What are the reasons? What might improve this situation?

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Nowadays, science and technology

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improved a lot compared to

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. Science has. Made development in all the

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including

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line.

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enhancement many countries still

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health related

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treason behind

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situation is

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created by one country. To explain more, when

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tries to import it becomes expensive and becomes very difficult to afford it.

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, they are lacking in basic facilities like female hygiene products,

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many suffer from malnutrition and

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problems

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for

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is, government should start a program where normal things are available at affordable prices.

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of giving contracts to one company, it can be provided to more in

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way prices can be controlled , employment increases

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. In a nutshell, we can say that there are

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to implement the solutions as well.

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Topic Vocabulary:

processed foods
sedentary lifestyles
exacerbate
dietary habits
affordability
unhealthy coping mechanisms
comprehensive public health campaigns
facilitating physical activities
subsidies
workplace wellness programs
psychological aspects
mindfulness
stress management

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Fully explain your ideas

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