Although access to medicine is improving, lifestyle related health problems exist in many countries. What are the reasons? What might improve this situation?

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enhancement many countries still
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tries to import it becomes expensive and becomes very difficult to afford it.
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many suffer from malnutrition and
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. In a nutshell, we can say that there are
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to implement the solutions as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • processed foods
  • sedentary lifestyles
  • exacerbate
  • dietary habits
  • affordability
  • unhealthy coping mechanisms
  • comprehensive public health campaigns
  • facilitating physical activities
  • subsidies
  • workplace wellness programs
  • psychological aspects
  • mindfulness
  • stress management
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