Some believe that it is a better idea for people to communicate through internet while others believe that face to face education is far more important than privious one. Discuss both sides.

Nowadays, technological advance has
impacting
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almost all sectors. One of
it
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is in learning activity which everything could be done from
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distance. Meanwhile, several communities believed that offline learning is play a pivotal role
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students
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development.
This
essay will discuss both views. It is admitted by many people that studying from
distance
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is way more effective. It could save more time and money to travel to school,
although
people still have to pay
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internet.
For example
, the monthly expenditure for my wifi is only around 20$, which is cheaper than
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to school.
Thus
,
this
learning scheme
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people to save more time and money.
On the other hand
,
other
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argued that offsprings still need
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interactions as it could increase
students
'
attitude
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. By meeting in the same place, teachers could see directly to their
students
and quickly know if the
students
did not pay attention.
For instance
, when my teacher taught
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a digital platform, she never mention her
students
'
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or behaviour.
Hence
, the negative impact of it is
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characteristic
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would decrease sharply. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, indeed learning from
distance
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is an effective and easy way.
However
, it
also
has a drawback in
students
' behaviour. In my opinion, both methods are fine, yet educators could combine these.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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