Many manufacturerd food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

Sugar
is a natural ingredient used in food for
sweet
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taste.
Although
, any type of sweet causes
health
issues. I will not agree with the point that to
incease
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increase
price
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the price
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of
items
which contains
sugar
to avoid less usage which leads to healthy life. It is totally wrong. First of all, only
sugar
is not a reason
to
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for
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health
problems in human beings. Sometimes, you need
sugar
for good
health
. In rural areas, people cannot live without tea because they think tea
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overcomes
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the
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apply
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stress and give relaxation to
body
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the body
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.
Moreover
,
sugar
is the main ingredient in the making process of tea.
For example
, in Pakistan, the proportion of
sugar
to rice is 20kg to 5kg. It means a single household monthly
products
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product
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contains 20kg
sugar
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of sugar
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as compared to 5kg
rice
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of rice
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.
In
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results
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,
sugar
is commonly used in Pakistan.
Secondly
, the big reason is the
economy
.
Economy
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The economy
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of the country depends on exports and imports. State's import depends on their needs and export depends on their
popluar
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popular
growth crops.
For instance
, India is a big
economy
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state. Its major export is sugarcane. My reason to include
this
point is that if
regime
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the regime
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increases
price
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the price
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of
sugar
items
then
the citizens will boycott
sugar
products and
in
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as
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a result
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result
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the main export product is boycotted which leads to
downturn
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a downturn
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the
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in the
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economy
of the nation.
To sum up
, neither increase in
price
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the price
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of
items
which contains sweet nor
boycott
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a boycott
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of these
items
will help to reduce
health
issues because smoking can
also
kill
person
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a person
the person
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.
In addition
,
sugar
is less harmful than smoking.
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