The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008
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information about the destination of UK graduates and post-graduates after the college period in the year 2008.
Overall
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, it can be seen that in both cases, the
students
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who choose to
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study were the majority number,
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the lowest amount of
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choose to do voluntary work after college.
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, for
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who graduated and post-graduated in the UK,
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study was responsible for the highest amount destination, accounting for almost 30,000
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in both situations. We can
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graduated and post-graduated
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who choose
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part-time work presented a
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difference between them, comprehending
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almost 20,000 and 2,500 respectively.
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, for post-graduate
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students
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the amount of unemployment between them showed a difference of almost 100 per cent in comparison to graduate
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, account for 1,625 and 16,235
respectivelly
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respectively
. To summarize, it is possible to confirm that the number of graduated
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in the timeframe was almost 100 per cent different
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those who were post-graduate
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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