The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

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information about the destination of UK graduates and post-graduates after the college period in the year 2008.

Overall

, it can be seen that in both cases, the

students

who choose to

further

study were the majority number,

while

the lowest amount of

students

choose to do voluntary work after college.

Initially

, for

students

who graduated and post-graduated in the UK,

further

study was responsible for the highest amount destination, accounting for almost 30,000

students

in both situations. We can

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see that

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graduated and post-graduated

students

who choose

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part-time work presented a

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difference between them, comprehending

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almost 20,000 and 2,500 respectively.

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students

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the amount of unemployment between them showed a difference of almost 100 per cent in comparison to graduate

students

, account for 1,625 and 16,235

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respectively

. To summarize, it is possible to confirm that the number of graduated

students

in the timeframe was almost 100 per cent different

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those who were post-graduate

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The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

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