The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008
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depictsinformation about the destination of UK graduates and post-graduates after the college period in the year 2008.
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Overall, it can be seen that in both cases, the
studentswho choose to
furtherstudy were the majority number,
whilethe lowest amount of
studentschoose to do voluntary work after college.
studentswho graduated and post-graduated in the UK,
furtherstudy was responsible for the highest amount destination, accounting for almost 30,000
studentsin both situations. We can
forgraduated and post-graduated
forpart-time work presented a
slightlydifference between them, comprehending
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foralmost 20,000 and 2,500 respectively.
Finally, for post-graduate
studentsthe amount of unemployment between them showed a difference of almost 100 per cent in comparison to graduate
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students, account for 1,625 and 16,235
respectivelly. To summarize, it is possible to confirm that the number of graduated
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studentsin the timeframe was almost 100 per cent different
ofthose who were post-graduate
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