26. Many people believe that majority of children in western countries are being obese. Is it true? Agree or disagree. Give reasons and examples.

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It has become common now that
children
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all over the world suffer from numerous
health
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, whether bad nutrition conditions in Africa or
obesity
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in Europe. Despite, the perfect healthcare system in Western countries,
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are being obese, There are potential reasons for
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phenomenon. In the following essay, I am going to elaborate on these reasons with relevant examples.
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with, the most obvious reason for
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's
obesity
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problem is the overusing of technology. Nowadays, kids are captivated by video games and social media platforms
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as YouTube and FaceBook.
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of that, they prefer to stay home rather than go outside and practice any physical activity.
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, they gain more weight and become obese.
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, parents have become so busy in their daily work lives to realize the
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issues of their offspring.
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, some parents let their kids with babysitters the whole time
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the hard work schedules they have day after day,
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they do not have much time to care about their offspring's
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.
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, bad habits
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as eating fast food for a long time, would pose a threat to
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's
health
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and lead to
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being over-weight
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over-weight
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overweight
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.
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, eating fried chicken or pizza as a daily meal or a daily dinner
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would make these harmful
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ingredients
turn into fat and cause
obesity
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.
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, if they do not
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any sport or any sort of activity in school or in the neighbourhood, they would put more weight.
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, it is not only the danger of the nutrition types but
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the danger of daily routine. In conclusion, it is undeniable that the vast majority of
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in Western countries suffer from
obesity
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, and there are clear reasons for
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issue that we should deal with it.
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