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Progenies are a lot of strains this days from educational, communal and commercial perspectvies. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

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Introduction
Progenies are an additional amount
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pressures
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of pressures
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this days
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this day
these days
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.
This
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is
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apply
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essay intends to conference the excuse
of
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for
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 these strains  and
this
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 is trouble
for
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to
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 settle.The purpose
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this
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of this
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 composite is
adress
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address
 these issues
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and relive
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relive
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relieve
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 the problem. I
belive
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believe
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 that
children
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 must
such
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 mounting
pressures
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.
Body paragraph 1
There are too plenty of collective and commercial
pressures
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.
Children
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are have
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have
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 academic
pressurss
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pressures
pressure
.Progenies are not
rivalry
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rival
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 with other
teenagres
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teenagers
.
The
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They
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 want
study
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to study
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 different into warm clothes and various eat
meal
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meals
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.
This
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 is the main reason
joining
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for joining
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 the street thugs and
then
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to hurt
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hurting
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 everyone.
Body paragraph 2
The somethings are not simple.
Children
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 should always be treated gently. Because
children
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 like people who are in a good
reletionship
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relationship
.Currently for
child rearing
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child-rearing
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. Everyone
think
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thinks
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 that teachers are responsible but parents
is
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are
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 different.
Therefore
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 parents should not be
in different
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indifferent
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 to the child.
Body paragraph 3
To
summeries
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summarise
,there is no doubt that the progenies, of
this
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day
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,day
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 are facing so many
pressures
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 but
we
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apply
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sometimes they need to be pressured as if we do not burn them
as a result
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 they become illiterate.
Conclusion
These are my thoughts.

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