Some people think they have right to use as much freshwater as they want. Others believe governments should tightly control the use of fresh water as it is limited resource. Discuss both views and give your option
Compared to fifty years ago,
human
now could consume freshwater easily. Fix the agreement mistake
humans
However
, most of
people use Change preposition
apply
this
advantage unwisely, and others believe that the government should tackle this
issue. This
essay will discuss both views.
It is widely believed that technological advancement has provided communities a
Add the preposition
with a
covinient
access to clear Correct your spelling
convenient
water
. Furthermore
, the water
ussage
Correct your spelling
usage
not
only limited Add a missing verb
is not
for
Change preposition
to
the
consumption and cleaning thingsCorrect article usage
apply
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
for making entertainment such
as water
park
and Fix the agreement mistake
parks
water
fountain
. Fix the agreement mistake
fountains
For example
, in Bali
there are a lot of Add a comma
,Bali
pool
in every villa or hotel. People there did not have any struggles in terms to get fresh Fix the agreement mistake
pools
water
. Hence
, societies across the world used water
not only for primary needs,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
secondary
needs.
Change preposition
for secondary
On the other hand
, several communities have different
Add an article
a different
point
of view and Fix the agreement mistake
points
Add a missing verb
are hardly
hardly
against Replace the word
hard
this
habit. Those communities believed that we should use water
wisely as there are many parts of the world still lacking of
Remove the preposition
apply
water
access. For example
, in
twenty years ago we could easily get fresh Change preposition
apply
water
from 5 meters from the surfaces, yet the surfaces today already
full of dirt so Add a missing verb
are already
that
the Correct word choice
apply
water
contain virus, bacteria, and others. Even though,
there are Remove the comma
apply
technology
appliances to overcome it, citizens still believed that the government should establish regulations Replace the word
technological
according to
this
issue.
In conclusion, although
human
Fix the agreement mistake
humans
provided
Add a missing verb
are provided
by
Change preposition
with
water
everyday
, they could not Replace the word
every day
spent
it in Change the verb form
spend
unappropriate
ways. Correct your spelling
inappropriate
Furthermore
, many surfaces in this
world already
poisoned and it Add a missing verb
are already
dangerous
for people to consume. Unless the government take action to overcome Add a missing verb
is dangerous
this
issue, humans in the future will be lacked
Change to the active voice
lack
have lacked
of
fresh Remove the preposition
apply
water
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