Some people think they have right to use as much freshwater as they want. Others believe governments should tightly control the use of fresh water as it is limited resource. Discuss both views and give your option

Compared to fifty years ago,
human
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now could consume freshwater easily.
However
, most
of
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people use
this
advantage unwisely, and others believe that the government should tackle
this
issue.
This
essay will discuss both views. It is widely believed that technological advancement has provided communities
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covinient
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convenient
access to clear
water
.
Furthermore
, the
water
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usage
not
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only limited
for
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the
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consumption and cleaning things
,
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but
also
for making entertainment
such
as
water
park
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parks
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and
water
fountain
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fountains
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.
For example
, in
Bali
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there are a lot of
pool
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in every villa or hotel. People there did not have any struggles in terms to get fresh
water
.
Hence
, societies across the world used
water
not only for primary needs
,
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but
also
secondary
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needs.
On the other hand
, several communities have
different
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point
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of view and
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hardly
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against
this
habit. Those communities believed that we should use
water
wisely as there are many parts of the world still lacking
of
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water
access.
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,
in
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twenty years ago we could easily get fresh
water
from 5 meters from the surfaces, yet the surfaces today
already
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full of dirt so
that
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the
water
contain virus, bacteria, and others. Even though
,
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there are
technology
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appliances to overcome it, citizens still believed that the government should establish regulations
according to
this
issue. In conclusion,
although
human
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humans
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provided
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by
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water
everyday
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, they could not
spent
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it in
unappropriate
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inappropriate
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ways.
Furthermore
, many surfaces in
this
world
already
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poisoned and it
dangerous
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for people to consume. Unless the government take action to overcome
this
issue, humans in the future will
be lacked
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of
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fresh
water
.
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