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It is thought by some that it is better in live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside.

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Nowadays,the importance of quality of
life
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 between urban
life
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 and rural
life
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 has been an important issue for individuals.
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 a group of people believe that
live
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 in a city is
better
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a better
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 choice, the other group firmly
argue
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 that countryside areas are better
to
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life
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. Both views will be discussed at length in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, the supporters of the first view bring some reasons for their claim. As far as they are concerned,
citiies
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cities
 provide
wide
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 range of job opportunities, industries and educational centres.
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,Technology and modern lifestyle are more seen in these areas.
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, Government services and facilities
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 a c transportations and medical equipment are more common . They
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 emphasize the point that there
is
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 a lot of conveniences in the cities and people can live easier than
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the rural
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 population .
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, in my ,town there are many hypermarkets that often sell all
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requirements
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requirements
,
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, there are some others who are of the opinion that peace is more in the village. The proponents of
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 idea declare that in
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 area problem of pollution is less, because ,
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, there are few private cars. The environment in the village is
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 both picturesque and green
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 most days of the year.
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, fresh air and organic food are
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 available.
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, the public of the countryside mostly uses their animal and herbal products and they have less stress too, so they are the happier crowd. In conclusion, both views can be considered
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partially acceptable. But when it comes to my own viewpoint, I have to say that urban areas are more beneficial in terms of employment, recreation and entertainment
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 for the young generation.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
  • ecological footprint
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