We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own countries or communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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I'm afraid that I cannot give any positive answer or agreement on the statement in the question. From my point of view, helping everyone is essential and doable,
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idea is just an excuse to escape from responsibilities and duties. First of all, trying our best to help as many people as we can is an essential attitude so the second half is totally wrong to me. My own experience just proved it. I was travelling abroad and a young man who cannot speak English came to me for help to fill in a form. I could say no because I have to catch up with my bus but I did stop and helped him,
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I left. The next year, I was informed that I could join
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a great organization because someone recommended me. After some research, I found out that it was the young man who recommended me to his friends and his friends recommended me again to the organization. There is no absolutely isolated human being in the world, so everything you do will be connected by some unknown ties. If you do try to help everyone,
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try to help you back. Another reason to support my disagreement is that the development of
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technology makes it possible to communicate across time and distance. In the past, it was too difficult for us to help others living on the other half of the earth.
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, we can talk to those depressed ones completely online through some social applications, helping them release the pressure and giving them comfort and support. Anyway, distance is no longer an obstacle for us to help others and there are lots of methods to achieve
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goal, which means the first half of the sentence doesn't make any sense. Generally speaking, helping everyone is actually possible and is exactly what we should do. If we don't keep
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value in mind, we could become a selfish
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, the complete opposite of a charming and responsible man.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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